First draft of space chimp

W.A.L.T write a narrative

This is my writing of space chimp it is my first draft.
This is my Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Add a twist to add interest

 when we watch a  Video of a chimp in space, We had to plan it on a mind mup and then we had to writ it on a docs, And this is what i have been up to in my writing.

Boom! The rocket was as fast as a bullet, and went into space. Silence! I was so terrified because in 5 minutes I am going into space. I start to fall asleep, I am a good happy chimp. I have be sent into space to be a science experiment. I will be here for 65 years. What will earth look like when I get back? I was in the space and my leader gave me are Picture to take with me, so I can remember him when I am alone in space. I woke up and he saw the flashing stars. Then the space capsule said, “Are you there and alive?” and I said, “I am alive, The space capsule said can you see earth”And I replied yes I can see the big bill of earth . I saw The milky way it was as beautiful as the sun. The sun shone right into my face and I woke up and when the sun went away and I went back to sleep. I saw earth and I was so excited to see my Trainer, then the space ship raddled and boom the rocket was so fast that the parachute shoot came out and he whoosh down to earth with a CRASH .Terra firma!

My worst lunch say ever

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

FIRST DRAFT

Moving time

In the afternoon  it was another beautiful day at the African Savannah it is time to migrate to somewhere else if the lions pride come and attack all the big buffalos attack the lions when the calf's  wait in the middle of the herd.

I saw the calf  in the dirty water

I saw the calf if it  came near the bank I Will eat the calf to shreds.

When i was hovering   around  the water, til i soer  the lion bas up to attack the baby buffalo and when the baby buffalo was running  from the lion  the lion jumped up and  got the baby  buffalo.

It was my worse lunch day ever  because  the lions was taking the crocodile lunch from the drug war so the crocodile did get his lunch.I