The night before christmas

In writing we have been working on narrated storeys and I have made one that you may like it is the night before christmas.

I hope you like my writing and please leave a comment.

Here is my writing.

It was the night before christmas and the puppy dogs were outside  Santa’s workshop. The to puppy dogs were playing in the snow. The puppies looked like they were white and fluffy and the white fur on the puppies was camouflaged in with the snow.  

The puppy dogs were having a snowball fight, when they threw the snowball every time it would go splat! and the snow from the ball would go everywhere. Which made them laugh and laugh. They were having a great time.

Then the puppy dogs went for a walk down the snowy path on there way passed a sign that could speak it spoken “beware of the dog catcher’ .

The dogs did not see or hear the sign and they walk right passed it and they went straight into the dog catcher’s property.

When the the dogs went into the property the dog catcher had cameras all around the property.

He also had some tripwires and some other spy gear so he could catch all the dogs in the North Pole.

And when Benji went in, he accidentally set off the alarms, and the dog catcher got Benji . Then Angel rushed home to report what had happened back to Santa.

The dog catcher put Benji in the cage and he put it on top of a shelf with only water for him  to drink. Benji was scared up on the shelf because he was on his own.

The dog catcher was thinking that he will get all the dogs at the North Pole.

The dog catcher looked like and old man that likes to hunt Polar bears for their meat.

The dog catcher was going to use the dogs  to sniff out all the polar bears in the North Pole.

When santa got told he went to his electric sled and Angel jumped in with Santa and they went to look for Benji.

They came to the dog catcher house and  Angel started to bark. Santa new that Benji was in that house.

So Santa and Angel went  around the back of the house, and then they found an open window and Santa told Angel go through the window and look for Benji.

if you find Benji  yelp and I will go to the front door and knock and get the dog catcher to the front and you can get Benji  out safely.

So Angel yelp that she found Benji  so santa quickly went to the front door and knock.

And the dog catcher came to the front door and opined it, when the dog catcher saw Santa,Santa told the dog catcher if you don't do the right thing you will get put on the naughty list and that means you will not get any presents.

So Angel got Benji  out safely and they went round the front to Santa and the dog catcher swor the dog and he went to the back to see if the dog he got was still there but it was  Benji  & Angel bullet a electric dog that looked like Benji, then Santa told the dogs to quickly jump in the sled so the dog catcher can not get you, and when he gets back from the back of his house I can say goodbye.

so the dog catcher came back from the back of his house and Santa told him see you later so Santa went back to the workshop with his puppies and he made the dogs two chairs next to him either side so he can keep an eye on both of his puppies.

So Santa and his two puppies lived happily ever after..

The story of Get,Jif,Jeff

Here is my made up Fairy tail is from th three little pigs

Characters=

Jif ,Jeff, Get and Johnny

The three kids and the big scary and bad Johnny

Once upon time  there was three kids there named Jif, Jeff and get.

Jif was  are sad one  he was wearing a avrals so was the  
other 2 kids so he was making his new straw house,

Get was are happy kid he likes to play ball so he made a wood house,

Jeff  he a are smart and exalit young boy so he made a brick house for himself.

One day there was a man with lots of breath and he came by.

His name was Johnny he went to  Jif and went knock knock and he said
let me in or I blow your house done and he did,
so Jif ran to Get house and seid let me in the is a man trying to get me can you let me in.

He let him in and then Johny came to gut house and knock knock

The big scary Johnny came back to get the two kids he said let me in or
i will blow your house down and the kids said no!

So like he said he blow the wood house done and the too kids ran to Jeff.  +

They knock on the doe and said let me i plus there is a big scary Johnny outside pulse and he let them in.

And then the big scary Johnny knook on the door.Let me in or blow you house done.

They said no so like he said he tried to blow it done.

But he oud not blow it done so he went up to the roof.

The three kids new he was coming down the chimney so the pu wood and turned it on.

And the big scary Johnny fell and he was dying in the fire and he was dead after 1 minute.

And the three kids named Jif Get and Jeff were happy a gen so they lived happily ever after.

The End

My Writing

William Storer

71HeiHei Road

Christchurch

Thursday 21th september

Mr Palmer

180 Waterloo Road

Hornby

Christchurch 8042

Dear Mr Palmer

It is so exciting that the learning center has moved closer to my class,
so when it is morning tea or lunch time It is a lot closer.
I can just go there and I do not have to walk very far.

Nathin,Alex and I like playing Uno,
It is a fun game I think everyone should play it is a good  learning game for other's.

I think that you should get more fun  learning games.
I got a game that I would like to see it is called Emoji Uno.
It is like the other one but you can get points and you can get big points with +4 +2 and skip etc.
Which would also help with our maths learning.

There is about 10 or so people that go to the Learning Center,

It is a fun safe place for everyone to go to. The people that go they like
the games and they like to meet new people.

I like to vs older people they are very hard to bet but I can beat  them.

On cold days I  know a place that I can go. It is a nice and warm place to go.

It’s always cools me down when it is a hot day.
It is a safe and enjoyable place to go to and hang out.

Suggestions:

I think you should add a learning area so you can do your school work.
I think we should have more bean bags and chairs in that learning center.
I think we should also have a games area so we can vs others people.
I think the games area should have tables and chairs that you could put stickers on it so you would
know the chairs with stickers are the gaming area ones.

These are only a few suggestions I think will improve our learning center.

Your sincerely

William Storer

My writing to my Nana

In writing we have ben working on piswading people,we had to write about some one so I did my Nanna. I hope you enjoye my peice of writing.

Dear Nana

I am writing to you because I have an issue that I feel very strongly about and need your help with it. In the past I have noticed that my brotherś Jacob and Joseph are coming to your house and are having more sleepovers at your house then I am.

The question I am asking you today is why is it that my brotherś Jacob and Joseph are allowed to have more sleep overs than me. I have noticed that when I ask you, you always say no because of work and  when they ask you say yes to both of them. When this happens I feel sad and angry because I am always stuck with my little sister Sophie. When it is just Sophie and me, I get so angry because she will not leave me alone and I get even angrier if she doesn't leave me alone.

Nana I have thought of some solutions to solves this problem. I can come and help you and stay with you one weekend, and then next it can be Jacob  and then Joseph, or you can have me and then take both of them.

Or you can have all of at the same time.

You can have Joseph and me or Jacob and me.

Overall I think this would be a good idea and fair for everyone to stay the night.

We get the same amount of time with you, which I believe is important.

You can do some fun things with one person and then you could do different stuff with the other too. It will not matter at all what each brother gets to do with you but most importantly is that we all get to spend some time with you.

 

Thank you nana I hope I can come and spend the night with you

My Comic story

This is a story about a Rabbit and a Dog. Ranit and I worked on it and we got it finished.

My Dear future Me

This Term we have been working on a piece of writing it is "Dear Future Me" and this is what I have done.

Dear Future Me,By the time you read this many years will have passed.  In fact you will be turning 25 years old.  This is a little reminder of what your goals, dreams and aspirations were as a 10 year old.Did you train hard at football and become a professional football player? Did you make the New Zealand All Whites? You hoped to travel to England one day to play too it will be fun.I wanted to play for  an England football team. I also want to own a fast food restaurant.I wanted to live near the beach in Christchurch but have an extra large home. William from the past.

The Lie

This term we have been working on something like poem.And it's About a Lie and the Truth from a vimeo and this is what I have lettering from the vimeo.-
 

Sleepover at Nanas house

Sleepover at Nanas house

On Friday and Saturday in the first week of the holidays, I went for a sleepover at my Nana and Grandad. I went there to have fun and help do the garden. Joseph my brother, who we also call Squeaky, came for a sleepover as well.

Firstly, my Mum told me to pack clothes, then I went into my bedroom and packed it into a bag and I was so Excited to see my Nana and GrandDad .Then my nana came to pick me and Squeaky up,then we went to the Wycola Fruit and Vegetable shop. We got 3 buns with salad, 3 drinks and 3 lots of hot chips then went back into the car.

On the way to nanas house I looked out the window and saw builders working, doing hard work, and then we arrived at nanas. I jumped out the car door and went in and saw Misty the cat and then I sat down and ate my food.

I went to go and get dressed and then I asked to watch tv and my nana said yes so I watched the Simpsons. Next I went out and did the weeding and Squeaky did the lawns and we both got 10 dollars each.

Conclusion (Ending

I had a really good time in the first weekend of the holidays at my Nana and Grandad’s house. I was happy that I got to eat burgers and hot chips and watch the Simpsons. I was glad that I could help Nana with the weeding and get ten dollars. I hope that I can do it again another weekend.

Space Chimp

W.A.L.T Write a narrative. It helped me when we watched the video and wrote a story about the video. I will try to work quicker next time. I am proud that I got it finished.

First draft of space chimp

W.A.L.T write a narrative

This is my writing of space chimp it is my first draft.
This is my Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Add a twist to add interest

 when we watch a  Video of a chimp in space, We had to plan it on a mind mup and then we had to writ it on a docs, And this is what i have been up to in my writing.

Boom! The rocket was as fast as a bullet, and went into space. Silence! I was so terrified because in 5 minutes I am going into space. I start to fall asleep, I am a good happy chimp. I have be sent into space to be a science experiment. I will be here for 65 years. What will earth look like when I get back? I was in the space and my leader gave me are Picture to take with me, so I can remember him when I am alone in space. I woke up and he saw the flashing stars. Then the space capsule said, “Are you there and alive?” and I said, “I am alive, The space capsule said can you see earth”And I replied yes I can see the big bill of earth . I saw The milky way it was as beautiful as the sun. The sun shone right into my face and I woke up and when the sun went away and I went back to sleep. I saw earth and I was so excited to see my Trainer, then the space ship raddled and boom the rocket was so fast that the parachute shoot came out and he whoosh down to earth with a CRASH .Terra firma!

William's The sad elder chimp.

This is my mindmup of Space Chimp Planning for my narrative story 

My Learning Goals

My Learning Goals

(Mid year Reflection)

My worst lunch say ever

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

FIRST DRAFT

Moving time

In the afternoon  it was another beautiful day at the African Savannah it is time to migrate to somewhere else if the lions pride come and attack all the big buffalos attack the lions when the calf's  wait in the middle of the herd.

I saw the calf  in the dirty water

I saw the calf if it  came near the bank I Will eat the calf to shreds.

When i was hovering   around  the water, til i soer  the lion bas up to attack the baby buffalo and when the baby buffalo was running  from the lion  the lion jumped up and  got the baby  buffalo.

It was my worse lunch day ever  because  the lions was taking the crocodile lunch from the drug war so the crocodile did get his lunch.I

Williams Animal Creator.

                 Wollygispot

Head: Woolly Spider Monkey

Woolygispot eats 90% fruit, nuts, seeds, insects and birds eggs.

Body: Zebra weigh from 227 to  272 km

Legs: Giraffe The giraffe is the tallest mammal, reaching as high as 5.5 metes so that it can reach food from high trees.

Tail: Spotted Trunk fish helps the Woolygispot swim when the Rain forest floods.

Habitat: Rain forest. Lots of trees for food.  

Diet: They love fruit but also eat leaves, flowers, seeds and sometimes bark and ferns.